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Could you give me a little advice? What do you think so far? Topic: How to write a circle of fifths
June 16, 2019 / By Cimone
Question: Nothing has happened, but what do you think about the over-all writing so far? I really would like help, but I'd prefer nobody's rude about it. Thank you guys. * “Why are you here, do you think?” “I, ah. I don’t really know,” I said pushing out a nervous breath. “How have you been feeling lately?” It was a simple question, but still not one I could answer. How had I been feeling? Alone, lost, unreal? I opened and closed my mouth. Unreal, I tested mentally. No, now that, I’m afraid, would make me seem truly insane. “Well... Like a teenager, I suppose.” I paused. “I don’t think I’ve ever felt younger.” “And what do you mean by that?” The doctor asked me, her eyes stone behind rimless glasses. “I mean, I feel like my mom doesn’t ‘understand’. I can never make up my mind about anything. I feel like my life is meaningless. I feel like school is meaningless. I feel like...” Darn it. I had another one. Where is it now that I’m talking? That always happens to me. I know what I’m thinking. It’s plain and simple and clear and well thought out, up until I try to voice it. Realizing my elongated pause, I quickly spat, “ I’m not real.” Shi t. Her eyebrows rose. “What do you mean?” I hated the way she spoke so clearly, sounding as if she knew she were so much more intelligent, and being so comforted by this fact, she could humor me with my childish “problems”. I glanced at the clock, but didn’t look away. “It’s just an hour long session, Katrina. I promise it will be over before you know it,” My mother had said, her long auburn hair flapping out the open car window like children waving goodbye to their teachers from the bus windows on the last day of school, thousands of little fingers waving through the air. “She’s a great doctor. And if you decide you don’t want to go back, I won’t make you.” I could hear her swallow that promise, regretting the words the moment they hit her tongue. I watched the second hand slowly pace its way around the circle. Twelve, one, two, three, four, five. It moved slowly, exaggeratedly. As if it had to work so very hard to make it’s way back to the twelve. As if it were tired of repeating itself again, and again, and again, with nothing else to look forward to, except, perhaps, the end of time. “Katrina?” My eyes shot to the doctor. “What?” “I asked you what you meant by that. You said you don’t feel real.” “I- I don’t know. I just... say things.” I'm considering it. This is all I have written. I just started writing on a whim. Thank you for the idea, but I don't believe in filtering my writing. Besides, I'm fifteen. There's no way it would even be published anyway. (:
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Bab Bab | 3 days ago
Great start of a story!!! Keep writing. The swear word could be replaced if you are planning to give this story to kids......
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Bab Originally Answered: How to get over my ex! Please give me advice?
How to move on from your ex: Remove Old Photos: Make sure there are no photos of you and your ex lying around the house. You could be having a great day and then all of a sudden go into a drawer and find a photo of the two of you hugging in a swimming pool. While you may not have gotten sunburned at the pool, you might have gotten burned by your ex and you don't need to be reminded of it. Pack up all of the photos and put them in a box far away from any place you could stumble upon it. Save cell phone pictures to a folder in a location you never or rarely go to. Go New Places: Going to the same restaurants, cafés and coffee shops that you went to with your ex should be off your radar. It's best to find new places with new faces. Don't go into places where they know you as a couple when you want the world to now know you as a single person. Remove Cell Phone Reminders: Delete any old voicemail messages or texts from your ex. That birthday text message your former partner sent you last year might have been cute then, but if you stumble upon it now it loses its luster. Clear out your inbox and make room for all the new messages and possibilities. Select New Music: Don't listen to songs that remind you of your ex. There's nothing like making an effort to put your ex out of your mind and then the song that played when you started dating starts up on your iPod. Clear the decks and make a new playlist. Login to Your New Life: The Internet probably contains many reminders of your ex. Your Facebook may need the biggest clean-up. Head in there and delete any photos with both of you together. Also, the friends that went over to your ex's side of the fence once the split happened should be unfriended immediately. Think Positive Thoughts: It's not just physical things that can remind you of your ex. Thoughts that we have can change our outlook on life, so think positively. Don't remind yourself of all of the things your ex did that you couldn't stand. Instead, be positive and focus on all of the things you're going to achieve in your new life. Make Notes of Your Progress: Write down the progress that you're making as a new single person. Get a journal and put down your thoughts as they come to you. List where you've been and where you're headed. This will keep your eye on the prize -- happiness.
Bab Originally Answered: How to get over my ex! Please give me advice?
I know that when that happens to people in similar cases, it really drags down their self-esteem. To get over anything in life, you have to accept. You just keep living life normally and I guarantee you'll find a better guy along the way. And when you do, you won't even remember your retarded ex :) Just show him that you're fine without him and better off too.
Bab Originally Answered: How to get over my ex! Please give me advice?
You get over him by knowing that he is garbage. Who cries over trash? He WILL do this to every girl he meets. You cant change a pig into a prince. So, rest knowing that you have decreased your risk of getting an std.
Bab Originally Answered: How to get over my ex! Please give me advice?
well... It basically depends on the type of person you are.... I remember when I wanted to get over a guy.... All I did was to totally remove him from my life for a month.. I deleted his number.. and I took him off my facebook friends list.. to show him that I wanted nothing to do with him... there was no way he could get in touch with me.... and in the blink of an eye I got over him... And when I got over him.. then I saw him back... And I just spoke back to him as if we are just normal friends... and as if nothing happened..... And thats how it played out... but as I said before.. it basically depends on who you are... some people ... rush in another relationship in order to get over their ex.. allot of guys tell me that... thats what they do.. while some people.. just cut their ex off completely for a while until they get over them.. like myself... it all depends on the type of person you are.....maybe you could go out more... to take your mind off things... try to do as much things as possible to make you smile... maybe by doing that... would let you get over him...<<>>

Bab Originally Answered: Please help me and give me some advice. I just do not know what to do!:(?
Forget getting into more debt for education if you're not sure about what you want to do. Find a job now to pay the bills and you'll figure out what you want to be when you grow up along the way. It takes some of us a while to figure it out - I was 25 before I went back to college. You're spending hours a day researching careers online... start applying for jobs. Find retail stores and/or restaurants and go apply in person.
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