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How would you improve this simple madrigal to human folly?

How would you improve this simple madrigal to human folly? Topic: How to write a four line poem
June 19, 2019 / By Aldus
Question: Vanitas My hours are spent in holy quests And in the end my search may fail The Holy Grail Of human striving surely rests In knowing who we are And is not found in journeying afar. It lives this moment, here and now; We must not travel to the ends Where Time too bends, But only learn the why and how Of our identity, And that one thing alone can make us free. We can’t know what the future brings, The awful horns on which we're caught Lie in our thought Which binds itself in subtle strings That grow at last to chains Until no dream of freedom then remains. Our searching is the crown of fools Who sit upon an ancient throne And die alone Bedecked, bedizened all in jewels, But search and search we must While all that’s true and living turns to dust.
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Tallula Tallula | 10 days ago
I like this poem for how it turns and turns until it turns to dust. The first stanza quite forcefully asserts a theme which is even more ascetic than Eliot's, `and the end of all our exploring/will be to arrive where we started/and know the place for the first time.' (Why Four Quartets comes to mind twice in a row, I do not know; I have not read it in about a year.) For some reason I think this all quite daring. I like the phrase, `where Time too bends,' while the allusion to the Phaedrus draws out an amusing pun on Horn clauses. I half like the last three lines of the penultimate stanza; `strings' to `chains' is a persuasive intensification, and the rhyme on `remains' with the 6-10 line lengths is delightful. But there is also something too facile in this line; perhaps it is the use of `dream,' and indeed `freedom,' because while you write `make us free' in sz 2, I feel freedom is less the subject of the poem than self, while self, I would argue, is constraint. For this reason too, `identity' in sz 2 is difficult for me because of the conflation. The last two lines of the poem are compelling without qualification. The image of the first four of this stanza is perhaps uncharitable, but the force of the contrast with the last two lines is undeniable, and the connexion between the first and the fifth line is wonderful. Overall, I think it is a very interesting madrigal.
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Tallula Originally Answered: i have a simple question! please. i need help, what shall i do?
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Tallula Originally Answered: i have a simple question! please. i need help, what shall i do?
you need to re write some sections your letter begins well but then seems to go off into a comic manner. if it is a letter address the letter 'Dear Sir Arturo' and then on the next line begin to write the letter. eg: Dear Sir A, Our guidence ... (blah blah) On line 3 when you are indroducing your interests dont use the word kid. instead you could say something similair like; Since i was a small child, i usually.... OR since the ages of 5, i ... OR Since a young age, i ... then you can say: i presented myself as a good role model for my younger cousins as we i usually role played where i was a teacher figure to them. rather than saying 'the small ones and little humans you can rephrase that to say: i enjoy the concept of teaching children, especially the ones ages *insert age* which i would like the oppertunity to share good values with these young children. i am a friendly and patient indivual and i will try my best to teach professionally the the last 2 lines of the letter you wrote are fine.

Regina Regina
If i ought to, my take on your poem, forgive me in case you don't love it... Such longing love, could draw one nigh I feared nevertheless you're able to turn from me to bounce in flames that burn so intense Spit each and each ash to earth's floor to verify the 1st time nevertheless, my discomfort replaced into good Did all they pronounced replaced into lead off beam I felt my heart and soul ignite Now expensive love can not stay I melted in such ideas of you found out i replaced into on the area enable each bit i'm seize hearth Now I stand, frozen in this ledge Farewell to you and what i replaced into My soul I saved afloat for years My drifting could have been a pause not, do I drown in tears
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Regina Originally Answered: Is the Christian God portrayed as a human?
Jesus IS GOD!! Isaiah 7:14 as compared to Matthew 1:23,, as well as Exodus 3:14 compared to John 8:58 and John 20:28 for starters! ("Islam" is a Counterfeit and the Jewish still need to come to "Completion" with their True God of Whom they have Rejected in the first place!!) <')))><
Regina Originally Answered: Is the Christian God portrayed as a human?
God the Father is Spirit. Only God the Son stepped out of the godhead and became flesh, to be a living sacrifice for the sins of mankind.

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